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In many countries, young people find it difficult to get a job after they finish their education. What are the causes of this problem, and what measures can be taken to solve it?

Nowadays, many people cannot find a job after they finish their study. This is a big in many countries. In this essay, I will discuss the causes of this and give some solutions. There are some causes of youth unemployment. , many people do not have work , so the do not want to hire them. The prefer workers with because they do not need training. , the education in universities is not matching with the job market. Students learn many theories but they do not learn practical , so when they graduate they cannot do the job well. , in some countries the economy is not good and there is not enough jobs for everyone, so people must compete with older workers for the same job. , there are some solutions for this . The government should make more internship programs, so people can get when they are studying. Also, universities should change their courses and teach more practical that need, computer and communication . , the government can give money to the that hire workers. This will encourage the to give a chance to people without . , youth unemployment happens because of lack of , bad education system and weak economy. this can be solved if the government, universities and work together.
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