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Task 2 Essay · advantages disadvantages
More and more people are choosing to study abroad for their university degree. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?
Today many people choosing study abroad. They go to another country for university. I think it has good thing and bad thing. But good thing is more big.
First of all, study in other country is very good. Because student can learn English well. English is very important nowdays. If they speak english good, they can get good job. Also, they can make many foreign friends. It is very fun. They play together and learn culture.
Second, study abroad is very expensive. Cost much money. Parents give a lot of money to student. Also, student live alone in other country. They miss mother and father. Sometime they cry. Food is not same, so they can not eat well. It is very hard time for student.
In conclude, study abroad have advantage and disadvantage. Advantage is learn language and make friend. Disadvantage is expensive money and sad. But I think advantage outweigh disadvantage because English is most important for future.
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What to improve
- Task AchievementYour response is 159 words. Aim for at least 250 to fully develop your ideas and avoid an under-length penalty.
- Task AchievementExpand on your ideas with more detailed explanations and examples.
- Coherence & CohesionUse more varied linking words to improve the flow of your essay.
- Grammatical RangeWork on subject-verb agreement and sentence structure for clarity.
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- Lexical ResourceYou used some relevant vocabulary related to studying abroad.