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Task 2 Essay · opinion
Some people believe that governments should invest more in public transport than in building new roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, traffic is very big problem. Many people say government should spend money public transport not new road. I am agree this opinion.
First, public transport is very cheap. If we take bus or subway, we save many money. Also, public transport is no traffic jam. Many car on the road make traffic jam. But subway go under ground, so it is very fast. Government need make more subway for people.
Second, new road make many car. Many car is bad for earth. Car have dirty smoke. It make air pollution. People sick because dirty air. So government not make new road. New road need very much money too. If no road, people not buy car.
In conclude, public transport is more better than new road. It save money and fast and clean. Government must invest to bus and train for future.
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Examiner feedback
What to improve
- Task AchievementYour response is 142 words. Aim for at least 250 to fully develop your ideas and avoid an under-length penalty.
- Task AchievementProvide more specific examples of how public transport benefits society.
- Task AchievementClarify your stance with a stronger thesis statement.
- Coherence & CohesionUse more linking words to improve the flow between ideas.
- Grammatical RangeWork on using correct verb forms and subject-verb agreement.
What you did well
- Lexical ResourceYou used some varied vocabulary related to transport and pollution.
- Coherence & CohesionYour essay has a logical structure with clear main points.
- Task AchievementYou addressed the prompt and presented a clear opinion.