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Task 2 Essay · opinion

Some people think that governments should tax fast food in the same way as cigarettes and alcohol in order to reduce health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

is very popular in many countries and it cause many health problems like obesity and heart disease. Some people say should put tax on same like cigarettes and alcohol. I agree with this idea, because I think it can make people more healthy. , if is more expensive, people will buy it less. This is same with cigarettes. When the increased the tax of cigarettes, many smokers stopped smoking or smoke less than before. So that tax can also work . People will think two times before they buy a hamburger, and maybe they will cook healthy at home instead. , the can use the money from tax for the hospitals. make many people sick, and the spend a lot of money to treat these sick people. It is fair that companies and customers pay some of this cost. The tax money can also be used for teaching children about healthy eating in the schools. , some people say this tax is not fair for the poor people, because is cheap and they buy it often. This is a true problem, but I think the can make healthy more cheap at the same time, so poor people also have good choice. , I agree that the tax on is a good idea. It will reduce health problems and give money to the for hospitals and education.
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