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Task 2 Essay · opinion

Some people think that schools should teach children how to manage money as a school subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days many people believe that must children about . I completely agree with this idea because is very important in our life and children should it early. , a lot of young people do not know how to use in a good way. When they grow up, they get a job and receive salary, but they spend all of it very quickly. If management, students will how to save and how to make a budget. , my cousin never about at and now he has many debts because he buys expensive things that he does not need. This is a big problem for him. , some subjects like history or geography are useful, but they do not help students in the real life directly. is different because everyone use every day. So it is more practical to this topic. Students can about bank, saving, and also how to avoid too much borrowing. These skills are very important for the future. , some people say that parents should to their children at home, not the . This is partly true. But not all parents know about themselves, so they can not it well. reason, the is a better place to it. , I strongly agree that should children how to manage . It is a practical and useful subject, and it can help students to have a better and more safe life in the future when they become adults.
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