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Task 1 Academic · bar chart

The bar chart below shows the number of international students enrolled at three universities in Australia in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows how many international enrolled at three in Australia in the years 2005, 2010 and 2015. , the of in all three , and Western had the most big increase. In 2005, Northfield had about 2,000 international , and this to 3,500 in 2010. In 2015 the again to 4,000 . Coastal also had increase. It started with 1,500 in 2005 and it reached to 2,000 in 2010, then 2,500 in 2015. Western is the most different one. In 2005 it had only 1,000 , which was the lowest of all . But in 2010 the to 3,000, and in 2015 there was 5,000 , which became the highest of the three . , all got more international in this period. Western the most fast, but Northfield was the biggest one at the beginning of the period.
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