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Task 1 Academic · bar chart
The bar chart below shows the number of international students enrolled at three universities in Australia in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows how many international students enrolled at three universities in Australia in the years 2005, 2010 and 2015. Overall, the number of students increased in all three universities, and Western University had the most big increase.
In 2005, Northfield University had about 2,000 international students, and this number increased to 3,500 in 2010. In 2015 the number increased again to 4,000 students. Coastal University also had increase. It started with 1,500 students in 2005 and it reached to 2,000 in 2010, then 2,500 students in 2015.
Western University is the most different one. In 2005 it had only 1,000 students, which was the lowest number of all universities. But in 2010 the students increased to 3,000, and in 2015 there was 5,000 students, which became the highest of the three universities.
In conclusion, all universities got more international students in this period. Western University increased the most fast, but Northfield University was the biggest one at the beginning of the period.
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What to improve
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- Lexical ResourceReduce repetition by paraphrasing key terms with precise synonyms.
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