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Task 1 Academic · bar chart

The bar chart below shows the number of international students enrolled in three subjects (Engineering, Business, and Medicine) at a university between 2015 and 2023. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates how many international studied Engineering, , and in one university from 2015 to 2023. , it is clear that the of in Engineering increased strongly and became the most popular . , decreased at the end of the period, while was always the lowest during the whole time. In 2015, was the most popular choice for international , with about 500 . This went up to 600 in 2019, but then it dropped to 450 in 2023. , Engineering showed a different trend. It started at 300 in 2015, which was lower than . It grew steadily every year. By 2023, it reached 650 and became the highest in the chart. For the , it had the lowest of international between 2015 and 2023. In 2015, there were only 100 studying . It went up a little bit to around 150 in 2023. The did not change very much compared to the other two .
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Examiner feedback

What to improve
  • Task AchievementInclude more specific data points for Medicine to enhance the analysis.
  • Coherence & CohesionUse a wider variety of linking words to improve the flow between ideas.
  • Grammatical RangeIncorporate more complex sentence structures to demonstrate a wider range of grammar.
What you did well
  • Task AchievementThe response provides a clear overview of the trends in student enrollment.
  • Coherence & CohesionThe structure is logical, with a clear introduction and conclusion.
  • Lexical ResourceThe vocabulary used is appropriate and relevant to the context.