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Task 1 Academic · bar chart
The bar chart below shows the number of international students enrolled in three subjects (Engineering, Business, and Medicine) at a university between 2015 and 2023. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how many international students studied Engineering, Business, and Medicine in one university from 2015 to 2023.
Overall, it is clear that the number of students in Engineering increased strongly and became the most popular subject. On the other hand, Business decreased at the end of the period, while Medicine was always the lowest subject during the whole time.
In 2015, Business was the most popular choice for international students, with about 500 students. This number went up to 600 in 2019, but then it dropped to 450 in 2023. However, Engineering showed a different trend. It started at 300 students in 2015, which was lower than Business. It grew steadily every year. By 2023, it reached 650 students and became the highest number in the chart.
For the Medicine subject, it had the lowest number of international students between 2015 and 2023. In 2015, there were only 100 students studying Medicine. It went up a little bit to around 150 students in 2023. The number did not change very much compared to the other two subjects.
Highlights:AaLinking wordsAaRepetitionAaGrammar
Examiner feedback
What to improve
- Task AchievementInclude more specific data points for Medicine to enhance the analysis.
- Coherence & CohesionUse a wider variety of linking words to improve the flow between ideas.
- Grammatical RangeIncorporate more complex sentence structures to demonstrate a wider range of grammar.
What you did well
- Task AchievementThe response provides a clear overview of the trends in student enrollment.
- Coherence & CohesionThe structure is logical, with a clear introduction and conclusion.
- Lexical ResourceThe vocabulary used is appropriate and relevant to the context.