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Task 1 Academic · pie chart

The pie charts below show the proportion of household spending in Canada across five categories in 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts compare how Canadian households divided their spending between five categories, , , transport, entertainment and other items, in 1990 and 2020. , became a considerably larger part of the family budget over the thirty-year period, the proportions spent on and entertainment declined. Transport remained relatively stable throughout. In 1990, was the largest category, accounting for 30% of total expenditure, followed closely by at 27%. By 2020, , had risen sharply to 39%, making it by far the biggest item, while had dropped to 21%. The remaining categories showed smaller changes. Spending on transport stayed almost unchanged, edging up from 15% to 16%, and the share of 'other' expenses grew from 12% to 15%. , entertainment saw the most significant fall in relative terms, shrinking from 16% in 1990 to just 9% in 2020. This suggests that families had less money available for leisure once essential costs were covered, the charts do not explain the reasons of this change.
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What to improve
  • Grammatical RangeVary sentence structures further and proofread for minor grammar and article errors.
  • Lexical ResourceReduce repetition by paraphrasing key terms with precise synonyms.
What you did well
  • Task AchievementThe response addresses all parts of the task and maintains a clear position throughout.
  • Coherence & CohesionIdeas are logically ordered with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.