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Task 1 Letter · informal letter
You have decided to move to a new city for a new job. A close friend lives in that city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - tell your friend about your new job - explain why you have decided to move - ask for your friend's help with finding somewhere to live
Hi Emma,
I've got some exciting news to share with you, and honestly you're one of the first people I wanted to tell. I've just accepted a new job in Bristol, and I'll be moving there at the end of next month!
The role is a marketing manager position at a small but fast-growing tech company. It's a real step up from what I'm doing now, with more responsibility and a much better salary. I'll be leading my own team for the first time, which feels a little daunting but mostly thrilling. After five years in the same office, I was starting to feel stuck, so when this opportunity came along I couldn't say no.
The main reason I'm so happy, though, is that I'll finally be living in the same city as you again! It'll be just like our university days.
This is where I could really use your help. Since you know Bristol so well, would you mind keeping an eye out for flats to rent? Ideally somewhere fairly central and not too pricey. Any tips on decent neighbourhoods would be brilliant too.
Can't wait to catch up properly.
Lots of love,
Daniel
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Examiner feedback
What to improve
- Grammatical RangeVary sentence structures further and proofread for minor grammar and article errors.
- Lexical ResourceReduce repetition by paraphrasing key terms with precise synonyms.
What you did well
- Task AchievementThe response addresses all parts of the task and maintains a clear position throughout.
- Coherence & CohesionIdeas are logically ordered with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.